Comments : Tocks.

  • 16 years ago

    by sibyllene

    Tick.

    What an odd and quirky poem you have here... I think the use of hyphens makes it. I expected it to have a really regular rhythm, like a tick-tock, but it really doesn't. There's a pattern that crops up occasionally, and then sinks away again, resulting in something with a sort of... patterned irregularity. It's uncomfortable, but something works about it. Yeah yeah! Write some more. So I can read it. Please?

  • 16 years ago

    by Dark Secrets

    Interesting poem here... nice rhythm too.