Excellent piece! Very emotional and heart-felt. But I think some lines were a bit to long like this one:

"mummy why wont you answer me why wont you why wont you shed a tear"

I think you added "why wont you" twice in a row, itd sound better if you'd take off one. So it'd be:

"mummy why wont you answer me why wont you shed a tear"

If thats what you meant then sorry. But overall I really liked it. Very sad. Keep it up!

Beautiful! each stanza pulled me in more!!!!

Hey,
beautiful and so sad, its a very emotion and straight from the heart poem. I think its great that you used the words mummy and daddy multiple times, it made the child in the poem look soo young and innocent. when I saw the length of the poem, I thought: I hope it isn't boring. but when I read the first line, you had me till the end! 5/5
kisses Stephanie

This is so sad, filled with emotions, it brought the tears in my eyes in the last two stanzas.
Excellently written piece from the beginning to the end, every part is great, filled with superb and touching descriptions.
The imagery in this poem is fantastic, especially in the parts with fairies and angels.
Amazingly done!
5/5 from me

I really like this poem it's really sad

This poem brought tears to my eyes.. it was so sad but so good! I could feel the emotion pouring out of the poem. Great job! 5/5 <3 <3

~Kayla~