Ohhh how I loved the imagery you painted in this piece. Intense, strong and very vivid, while a little creepy at times. Though I suppose that was the point, lol

Anyway, I loved this, it held my interest throughout, I found it to be very original and again, I thought the ending was the perfect way to wrap up, it was very hard hitting.

The rhyme scheme was kinda off but i liked it that way! i think you did a really great job!