Comments : Children Of the Moon

  • 16 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I thought this was both original and unique in concept, and I was hooked from the first line.

    Flow is perfect throughout the entire piece, and the imagery you created painted very vivid pictures in my mind.

    Beautiful ending, I found it to be very intense.

  • 16 years ago

    by Pete

    I'm going to guess that English isn't your first language. There are one or two parts in this piece where that is made apparent. an example ...
    "in down here, it's children, us, it see..."

    Other than tiniest little error, this is a marvellous piece of writing. It has visual imagery to the maximum, truly brings the reader into the mind-set and the world of the werewolf.

    So utterly dark it's slightly distrubing (in a good way). You go into so much detail about every aspect of these beings.

    This is a very aptly titled poem, I honestly could not think of a better title for this piece.
    Flawless flow right from the start, keeps you enthralled with this as it moves from wonderous to scary.

    Very nice work.

    ~Pete.

  • 16 years ago

    by HaileyHelen

    I really liked this one 2! Great job! i think u r doing a really good job!