This is a great poem i loved it, its got a lot of emotion and it is very powerful it shows you have to fight to survive :) i love it 5/5

--emz--

This really touched my heart

5/5

Nice vocabulary it helps express the poem with another level of depth.
keep writing and thanks for the comment
4.5
:)

I don't like rhyming in first stanza, because it isn't original, but rest of this poem is truly excellent. I like topic and you wrote it on very good way.

-My ideals are above all
so caught in this vortex of
never ending rises and falls.-

^This stanza is so powerful! I like how you described emotions and atmosphere that you created in whole piece is great, well done!

I LOVE THIS ONE VERY MUCH SO

Very good poem, keep writing