Good poem.

You expressed your feelings wonderfully.

A couple of things though. "Thoughts" doesn't rhyme with the other ending words in that stanza and to make this poem better you should shorten the last line in the poem because it's too long and throws off the flow.

But overall, this poem was good and I can't wait to read it when it's finished. 4/4

-Shannon <3

An alright poem.A couple lines I didn't understand.You should shorten the bottem lines a little bit.It would help with the flow a little bit.The idea of the poem was a bit confusing too.It could be how sometimes things get so out of control you feel helpless,or how you get blamed for alot of things.Anyway,I'll give this a 4/5.

Keep writing,
Miranda

Yea idk i really like it i give it a 4/5
it just feels like it hit home for me cuz idk im just having a crap day and this helps me.

Ehh. Mediocre flow and rhymes. kinda cliche. 2/5

This is excellent, how dare the one who don't give it a good rate!!!!

Very well written ,one I can relate to in a lot of ways.

Loved it. (-_-) huhuhu dam*

I liked this poem a lot, there was a lot of strong feeling depicted carefully in the poem but I feel like the rhyme scheme was strained at times, particularly in the end. The vocabulary was fine bu twith a few tweaking, this poem could be even stronger. Good work though!

Wow. It was very well written, expressed your emotions amazingly. It was strong with emotion. It framed how ,I'm sure, a lot of people feel. The last line seemed a little long to me, but if you like it then keep it. Well written, nice to read. 5/5!

Im a fan of not having my poems rhyme and you have done that. You just let your emotions come out without that added effort. Your poem is pure and beautiful.

Try stress in place of problems and minds slowly rot. It will help w/the flow and say the
same thing.