Comments : Beneath the stars (Monchielle)

  • 16 years ago

    by Cindy

    Steve
    This is a wonderful piece you have penned. You can feel the longing and passion in your words.

    Rose petals in the wind (A)
    Hoping dawn stays away (k)
    This special night is ours (l)
    Within my arms you sleep (m)
    Here underneath the stars (l)

    This paints such a loving vision.
    Excellent job my friend.
    Love Cindy

  • 16 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Steve,

    This truly is a very romantic poem, you did great!

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 16 years ago

    by debbylyn

    I've fallen in love with this form....thanks so much for posting it. This is a lovely and romantic poem.....you can't go wrong with rose petals....beautiful!

  • 16 years ago

    by geeeeee

    This is the second Monchielle I have read. I have to say that I really like this style of poetry. Yours flowed effortlessly and the wording was sublime. The images you have created are beautiful. A lovely piece.

    Take Care.

  • 16 years ago

    by shobhana kumar

    This is an amazing piece! the last stanza is so beautiful, especially the line "Hoping dawn stays away"

    great work, once again!
    peace
    shobhana