The only thing I didn't like about this was the repeated use of "She."

It kind of put me of a little.

Other than that, I thought this was beautifully written.

Flow was okay throughout, the imagery you portrayed in here is wonderfully displayed, it creates some very vivid visuals for the reader and I thought the concept was original and unique.

Wow this was really great, keep it up,
i've read a couple of your poems now, and they are fantastical, so i was wondering if you could comment and vote on sum of my poems, it would be greatly appreciated.
I'm new to writing poetry so i need some feedback, thanks,
Polaroid
p.s GREAT JOB

Wow this was really great, keep it up,
i've read a couple of your poems now, and they are fantastical, so i was wondering if you could comment and vote on sum of my poems, it would be greatly appreciated.
I'm new to writing poetry so i need some feedback, thanks,
Polaroid
p.s GREAT JOB