Well, for one, you deff. kept my attention throughout this poem.
Secondly, flow was a bit off, but overall, it came together nicely.
Third, the emotions displayed were very raw and full-blown.
Fourth, the depth you created was simply amazing.
Finally, this was an awesome read.
Good work and keep it up. (:
"Blocking out the rest of the world, "ignorance is bliss;"
Pretending has always been my better talent."
An effective and well written piece. For some reason the above two lines really called out to me, I don't quite know why. Lol. Nevertheless, the imagery was vivid and the structure was well kept. Well done. :)
Just a thought: You could write the above line with brackets around the word 'better' - so that it looks like this:
"Pretending has always been my [better] talent". I don't know, experiment! Haha :P
Oh my god, girl.
I love it. (:
My favorite poems, honestly.
Glosa verse always seems a bit off flow, but somehow you pulled it off. It was iffy here and there, but that's just because of the big stanzas, I think. Most of them are, to me at least. But, this one was great.
You did a wonderful job.
I'm so proud of you. (:
What an incredibly written poem! I've heard of a glosa verse but never really knew what it was. I am truly impressed! I think I'm going to try to attempt one, but I know it will probably not come out as amazing as yours! 5/5 :D