Awesome flow. lovely wording.

Wow this was really great, keep it up,
i've read a couple of your poems now, and they are fantastical, so i was wondering if you could comment and vote on sum of my poems, it would be greatly appreciated.
I'm new to writing poetry so i need some feedback, thanks,
Polaroid
p.s GREAT JOB

The emotion in this is fluid, yet you have to break up the lines. This is just one big paragraph. Try to break it up.
Put each new sentance on a new line. If some are too long, break it up so it works better.
Just a suggestion. But well done on the content. It's sweet. :]

Tammie

Nice poem....I like it a lot......