Wahh,, nice poem,, ^^
The emotion was very strong and powerful..
The flow was also very good,, and i like your wording,, it's wonderful...
I think the grammar just needed to be fixed a bit.. ^^
But it didn't decrease the mark.. ^^
well done,,
keep up the good work.
5/5

This is really great and I really love the flow. Two thumbs up for this one, "5/5."