Comments : Winter Wishes

  • 16 years ago

    by Cindy

    Debbie this piece is so sad yet the way it is penned makes it such a pleasure to read. The imagery and word choices are awesome. The flow is flawless.

    Stains of past to mar the ground
    Emptiness devoid of sound
    Frozen heart no longer feels
    Numbness has become so real

    This stanza moved me so much how many times I have felt this way.

    Pristine lake cast so serene
    Snowfall covers all obscene
    Breaths of love, a final plea
    Awake my love and follow me

    This last verse....is the one that I like the best. It makes me feel that two lost loves come together after death.
    ~Clapping~
    Excellent job!
    Love Cindy

  • 16 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    That was so imaginative and beautiful. The flow was so perfect in this. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by xXMohawkedMahemXx

    Loved it... =]
    such an amazing flow to the poem too..
    5/5

    .:H a m m y:.

  • 16 years ago

    by Elapsed

    Such sad words you have written here Deb...

    "Blanketed by icy pearls
    Adorned and crowned by fetal curls
    Rosebud remnants seal the pain
    Loneliness the last remains"

    The whole piece is wonderful, tho i found this stanza to hit home the most.. Great job Deb :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Lithium

    Thats great wording you really capture an image in this poem its really well crafted. xox sam

  • 16 years ago

    by Barry

    Sad the words you write.......your talent seems to have no limit........so beautiful the scene......but within it a dream

    cos you know its not true.....
    simply because......?
    love is......love is you

    beautifullly written poem

  • 16 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Deep and sad. Once again the flow is flawless. The word choice is excellent. The last 2 stanzas are my favorite and wrap this piece up well.

  • 16 years ago

    by DannieDemon

    ....this is one of the best peices of writing if read. good job.
    ...........7/5.....

  • 16 years ago

    by Yu Lee

    I loved the rhyme
    and the poem had so many great words to it.

  • 16 years ago

    by twilightfan

    OMG that was amazing!!!!
    last stanza was my fav all i have to say is magnifasent!!!!! 1000/1000