Comments : Temporary Pain Killer..

  • 12 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    Great showing the stories of this poem,, its has a strong message to everyone and very outstanding! i can see the rhyming are truly perfect even the structure are absolutely very fabulous.. nice expressing those lovely words and it has a very dept meaning. great and impressive 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Blissful

    OH MY .. this was just amazing!!

    The emotions expressed were deep and meaningful. My heart truly went out for this girl and the life she lived. The way you described her pain and lifestyle blew me away. The last stanza was the perfect way to end the poem. Well done *5/5*

  • 12 years ago

    by Stephanie

    This was magnificent. I'd say it's definately one of your best. :) It was beautifully written but the story behind it was heartbreaking. The emotions were strong and the flow was flawless. Everything was perfect. And I loved how you put certain words in brackets -- It really put the 'Hmph' in those words. Haha.

    "Kisses [momentarily] erase her pain, not for too long...
    Embraces allow her to forget; no sense of right or wrong

    It's a new man tonight; and [temporary] love is a must;
    Diving head first into this world; confusing love for lust.."
    ^^ Those four lines are perfection. Simply spectacular. Don't change a thing. Overall: 5.5

    -- Steph <3

  • 12 years ago

    by FridusBlueheaven

    I can relate to the emotion you put in this poem. Brilliantly written and flowed very well. Also I love your rhyme scheme. It is 5/5!!!