Comments : A new lease of life

  • 11 years ago

    by Pete

    OOdles man, this is dark. Very deeply disturbing images within it, nice metaphors used throughout though ..
    "...staring at a shadow ,
    of the man I used to be."
    ^^ Nice.

    Not entirely sure about one word in this piece .. "woozy" I use it IRL all the time, but I'm not sure it quite fits. I would possibly look at re-wording that sentence.

    It's a good piece to read as it flows nicely, regardless of the dark words contained within it.

    ~Pete.

  • 11 years ago

    by Jackie

    Very dark and emotional poem, one that many poets on here can relate to. 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by sarah

    I love this peice
    its so sad.
    i wish i was as good as you:]