WOW i really liked this poen great job loved how u expressed urslf and liked the flow!!! well if u can go check sum of my poems and comment for me plz!!!!!!!!!!!!

Awh. :|
That's so sad.
I thought it would end cute.
I'm sorry.

You did a wonderful job though. I like the reptition. And, the way you worded it was great.
The ending was bam, which is good, eh.

Maybe capitalize your I's and stuff.

Other than that, wonderful job, darling.

Hmm... I enjoy your writing style it's happy but it ends sad but... It realy makes you think about the poem and I found myself reading it again...

If you ended it sweet/lovely... It would have been just a sweet/lovely poem... I found it to be still sweet/lovely... But you feel your pain at the end so you tend to read it again... Great job!