My love please come take me away
Hold me in your embrace
Need to feel the suns warming rays
To touch your handsome face
Please take my hand, holding it tight
Lead me from darkness to the light
Please take my hand
Please take my hand
Fly away with me to new heights

this is just so outstanding, just so beautiful.....so very much touchy...its an oustanding piece dear...loved it so much....i wish i had the right words to appreciate this one....but i m just speechless.

great write sweetie

all the best and take care

Tis a great trijan refrain cindy, your great at these styles, the flow and grammer tis perfect, i give it a flawless 5/5!!!

I could never really pull off these forms, too many rhyming patters, so when I see one used and see that it is used well I am often in awe of the writer. Even more than these words come from a member of a club that has done nothing but embrace and strengthen these talents each member has. You're words are as beautiful as you are sweet to your friends.

Wow Cin...I am speechless....so different from you other work and yet as beautiful as ever!
You have the skills to make anything you want to, I am very sure of that.

*hugs*

5/5 Ingrid

Beautifully written rendition of this very dificult form....love the message of hope carried throughout the lines.....

"My love please come take me away
Where pain no longer lives
Where colors are bright no longer gray
Our love we can relive
Waiting for you to come for me
Together the sun we can see
Waiting for you
Waiting for you
Praying for you my final plea"

^beautiful....and sad....yet the whole piece has a hopeful quality that makes me imagine heaven.....Well done! Love, Debbie

Cindy this poem is awesome!!.. the whole piece was so sad and devastating.. well done on such a hard style of writing..

"My love please come take me away
I've been waiting for so long
Back in your arms to always stay
Hearing your loves sweet song
Joyous longing to fill my heart
Never again will we depart
Joyous longing
Joyous longing
Waiting so long for you sweetheart"

This stanza was simply breathtaking!!
Fantastic!!

Cindy, This is an exceptionally written piece, you have done absolute wonders with the form and the marriage of words to the form is like on made in heaven. Well done.

Steve

Dear Cindy,

I have no words for this beautiful hearbreaking piece you have written. Your talent shines like a star on this site and I feel so honoured to be on it and learn from poets like you.

your work always has a deep impact on the reader. It reflects the special person you are inside. And i guess that's why you are so special to all of us.

keep writing and inspiring
shobhana

Please take my hand, holding it tight

this line brought tears to my eyes, you have such a talent cindy, i can become lost in your passionate words and feel as if i am living your story, contineu to write with such talent as you do, you are an awsome poet and an inspiration xox sam

My love please come take me away
Where pain no longer lives
Where colors are bright no longer gray
Our love we can relive
Waiting for you to come for me
Together the sun we can see
Waiting for you
Waiting for you
Praying for you my final plea
^^^^
Cindy I can feel the ache in your heart through these words of longing you have woven my friend. ~wipes tear~ very heart touching!

My love please come take me away
Hold me in your embrace
Need to feel the suns warming rays
To touch your handsome face
Please take my hand, holding it tight
Lead me from darkness to the light
Please take my hand
Please take my hand
Fly away with me to new heights
^^^
Oh Cindy hun, the day will come where your sweet true love will take your hand, guiding you to the light of heaven's doors and hold you tightly for all of eternity.

I loved your title choice .... and you have penned a spectacular masterpiece with this form . It looks like such a difficult form but you made it look so easy.

Hugs for you .... and ~claps~ for this wonderfully penned write!
Love ya
Luanne

I LOVE THIS POEM IT'S SO BEAUTIFUL I ALMOST SHED A TEAR..... 5/5