Comments : Lies Instead

  • 16 years ago

    by Common Sense

    My hearts already racing
    ... I didn't know you have two hearts
    heart's*

    To ignore its in my head
    its ... do you mean what's* ?

    Yet, against my better judgment
    The comma is unnecessary ... it detracts from the most powerful sentence of the poem.

    Do you even proofread these? Lol x)