First Poem.. feed-back please

I liked that <33,
though it seemed umm cluttered perhaps?
But it was really good. x)

Awee!!! first 1

I agree with "someone Unknown" it did seem cluttered a little bit.

it is your first and hopefully not your last, don't worry you will find your way. a lot of us go through this where we get stuck and can't find the right words and doesn't think that it is good enough.

don't be so hard on yourself, give it time and good luck

I love the ending
great work
keep it up!

It was okay. for the first poem is not that bad. the flow was okay. the words were good. i kinda got confused but i like it still. very nice piece here. just work a lil bit more on ur emotions and feeling to put here. but rather then that very nice. =)

TaKe CaRe,
Frenchy

For your first poem i liked it. mine didnt come out too good, mine made no sence, just rhymed. lol