Comments : Render Me Breathless

  • 16 years ago

    by MyEscape

    First I'll start with my suggestion. Though this is a free verse poem, I think it would be easier to read if broken into stanzas or at least separate thoughts, instead of altogether like a story.

    But onto the commendation! I loved your wording like 'rusty scissors' and this was my favorite line

    Winter nights have me chilled, but I'll keep running even though you've stripped me of everything.

    SO GOOD! I could picture this all in my head and it was very very well done. Great job!
    *ME*