Comments : Super Child

  • 16 years ago

    by Lemma

    Aww! For a while there I was wondering how it was a sad poem and then it hit me in the 7th line. Very effective. I like the rhyming in this one. But where you say

    "But there I'm loved with no kind of distribute"

    Could "distribute" be changed to "dispute"? Would keep the rhyme and let you lose a syllable so the flow would be 100% tip top.

    Great poem,

    Em xXx

  • 16 years ago

    by ThomasBlackburn

    I like it its written nicely but i dont understand the superchild meaning, and how it relates to the second part of the poem, i guess i dont understand it, enlighten me