Loved the last line of this. Your unusual rhyme scheme was interesting too. It had a very neat structure to it so that it kept you reading to figure it out. I feel the last stanza really does let the truth shine, too. Because if we just let things go, goodbye may be hard, but it will come. good job!
*ME*

First thing that hits me about this poem is the fun new structure of it. I think it's quite simply adorable. The short sharp lines give an urgent or rushed tempo to it, forcing you to read on.

Even though this is a short poem (in terms of word count) you fill it with such lively and dark images.
For me, you really went to town on this on.

~Pete.

GOOD JOB!!
Nice flow bro,It would make a good pitt
song. LOL

Amazing poem,flowed together nicely