When I read this, I think "hot" for some reason. ^^ Very powerful. I love it. 5/5

Sarcasticly rude lol that sums it up anyway this was really good and the last few lines was the best it was a great choice of words and nice way to end it

Wow, wow...
This is amazing, Jenny, I truly love it! Brilliant word usage through the whole piece and effective, original atmosphere within every stanza.
This is my new favorite from you. I'm impressed. This contains so many excellently expressed emotions, and I can relate to this in so many ways.
Fantastic, endlessly powerful dark piece.
Keep writing!
5/5