Comments : Help me remember

  • 13 years ago

    by xoxShorteexox

    "Now I'm left with nothing but the police at my door,
    telling me that you have gone, your not with us anymore.
    I cannot remember what it was like with you that final day,
    before we said goodbye, before I sent you on your way."

    One change where it says "your not with us anymore."
    It should be you're. :]
    Just thought I'd let you know, darling.
    I loved it, the flow was amazing.
    Take care, Natz babe.

  • 13 years ago

    by Lisa

    Thats was amazing was so well-written
    i could almost taste the emotion
    it was remarkable
    great work Natasha
    hope to read more stuff of yurs soon

  • 12 years ago

    by Goth marionette

    That was so sad but it was so great and well expressed...loved it a lot...keep it up:)..5/5..