Comments : Wry Patterns on the Skins of Exposed

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Moon's hover around essence
    reached its maximum
    while the melted, metal hands of spectral dimensions
    flocked over awry path of irony.
    ^^^
    I love this. It is powerful and it represents great introduction into this piece. The "awry path of irony" is especially effective along with "metal hands of spectral dimensions. Great imagery in the whole stanza, too, carefully painted to hide message from the reader. (I found couple of possible meanings for this, and I can't decide which one is right)

    Find me!
    Somewhere between stars shaded with madness,
    smoldering ghost in the fragment of life's links waits.
    ^^
    Imagery in this part blossoms, leaving me to admire.

    -I think that the corpse of reality rots inside my darkness.-
    ^^
    I'm truly jealous when I read something like this lol Amazing, amazing, amazing line. I'm in awe. This is so vivid, so original, so dark...

    -Reasoning's crumbled into refecilon
    during our eternal feast.
    With blood I lave, wiping the soul's stains.
    Sight of mine fields is bleared by the odes to Gods.-
    ^^
    This reminds me on some of your poems about life. Very deep and greatly written.

    -Don't you want to get rid of borders
    and pale copulas of illusions?
    ...because the core is irradiated when the crust slithered
    and unexplained frustration's changed with newfound utopia-
    ^^^
    In awe... again. You always manage to take my breath away. This part represents great ending, and it is filled with deep thoughts. I especially like the last line because it is positive and it twists whole message of this piece.

    Keep writing!

  • 16 years ago

    by mier

    I am sincerely awed by your writing... How did you actually come up with these images, carefully described with breathtaking choice of words? I enjoyed every line in this poem.. Beautiful imagination and splendid title! I love how you interpret the title to the poem.. And I am awed by the images that you created and how you choose your words to potray such brilliant ambience...

    Great work! (:

  • 16 years ago

    by 4 track demo

    Praise to you my friend, upon reading this the emotion i felt was unashamed passion and creativity unleashed....well written...obviously...although i didn't find this to be a beautiful poem so much...rather,
    i thought it was a poem that kicked ass and gets a HELL YEAH! from me...
    john

  • 16 years ago

    by sara

    Amazing work!!! if I could rate u a 1000000/5 I would keep writing all of ur poems are great