Comments : Never-ending b.f.

  • 16 years ago

    by Behind Blue Eyes

    Ok, i like this poem, it's good!

    just a few spelling/grammatical errors to fix:

    Do [To?] help be[me?] be better
    When im bein[g] a jerk
    To understand what I feel
    When I *cant dont*[?] know what I feel
    A hug so tight
    You cant breath[e]
    Youre a true best friend
    To show me right
    When ive done wrong
    Someone to tell my secrets too
    Who I know wont tell
    To stick with me in[through?] the good
    And stick with me tough[through] the bad

    ok, so i put [?] when im not sure what word you were trying to use, and [*with a word*?] when i was making a suggestion. hope this helps!

    good job!