Dang this is soo sad. It sucks when people look other people over. Great job. 5/5
-vino

This is sad =[
but i like it...

I must say that this poem touches me. Good job and keep sharing your feelings and thoughts here =)

Interesting poem, somehow touching. I think that emotions are expressed in a good way.
It could be longer. If you use some more powerful and unique words and metaphors it would sound even better and you could create stronger atmosphere.
Anyway, I think that you wrote this with passion and it is really nice poem.

I forgot: Rhyming left really bad impression on me. It seem so forced and I want to suggest you to try to write non0rhyming poems because this piece would be so much better if it doesn't rhyme.

Amazing...very amazing. i know so many ppl that could fit perfectly into this poem. keep writing. thanks :]

Amazing...very amazing. i know so many ppl that could fit perfectly into this poem. keep writing. thanks :]

Really expressive