Thats such a strong ending, well done xx

I love this poem, the ending was really strong and tied the whole thing together really well! I like the way the poem is broken up! Keep up the amazing work!

The last stanza just killed me i swear i almost cried...yesterday was the anneversary of someone very close to me that died 2 years ago..it just hurts && when they die you do feel defeated.

thank you for all your comments & for sharing your writing

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Wow that gave me goosebumps

i love how you painted a picture
it really helps the reader
i like this poem because you have to do more than just read, you have to think about it a little to appreciate it
5/5 <33

Nice poem, It's soo sad to think in that way about yourself, don't give up that easily it'll just drag you somewhere emotionally unbareable

Wow. this is like the most deepest and saddest poem ever. i really don't know what to say [since i've never been in that sort of situation] other than 5/5.

keep you chin up.
because there are ppl dying just to see you fall.

sooner or later things will work out. and it'll seem like most everything will fit back in place. it might take a while. but i believe all things happen for a a reason. and i also believe that miracles really do happen.

so keep a smile on your face and be thankful for what you have.

much much much love,
mac.<3
[.just.another.silly.teenage.girl.]

Wow, that was really so powerful.
I could really relate to this poem and know the pain
of losing a parent.
but just know that you are not alone!!
stay strong hun!!
amazing write!!

shell

One thing that I noticed was you need a apostrophe for everytime you said doesn't. Umm, what else... This poem had a little bit of imagery, which was really good. Other than that, I don't think there was anything wrong with this poem, no major flaws... Nice write. 5/5.

Awww.... so sad... the last part is so beautiful....
wonderful write... very heartfelt...

keep writing.. :)