Comments : Dead On Arrival (Rondeau)

  • 15 years ago

    by kelleyana

    It is pleasing to the eyes and mind to read poems like yours the first time in this windy morning.
    "Void road I'll stroll, to the seen reality I'm now aware
    Memories will be buried, will remain forgotten, I swear
    Pictures soon to be scattered and torn along our floor
    Smokescreen of distrust will glide as you open our door
    Leaving promises rotten and broken, suspicion to wear
    As my heart then ripped apart." You are very talented. You poured out emotive words that captured the eyes and thoughts. All i can say is continue writing. Very well done, 5/5, kel.