I loved this one
Wish it was longer
because I was hooked
excellent write
5/5
kaila

Thais is really pretty, but i agree with Kaila i really wish is was longer. very good... 5/5

Again, you truly do have a way with words. Very raw emotions in this one, and that's important. I can almost feel the bitterness jumping off the screen, lol.

I liked the way you ended it, I thought it really added to the poem. As I mentionned on your other poem, I suggest using punctuation.

Take care.