This is a great start to the poem :) Can't wait to see the completed version.
I can see a lot of emotion in your words, well done.
Thanks for the comments on my poems
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Happens all the time you should really go for girls that you know and that makes you happy and feel gd cus a girl can be pretty on the outside but very ugly on the inside so be very careful...love always...xoxo

Aww. Another great work of art. You are the Master in the Piece.

So i bleed out my heart
and tighten my eyes- good line

Tell myself that should stop it
but my dumb self do the same
like cigarette, it cant quit
somehow still stuck in this stupid game

I should stop this vicious cycle
but my dumb self cannot agree
A selfish habit I cannot quit
Forever stuck in this foolish game

Can't wait to see you finish this one,