Comments : Forbidden Revelation

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow...
    This is truly amazing, excellently written. Whole poem has great, fantastically created atmosphere. I like the choice of words, emotions are expressed in a great way in every stanza. Whole poem is breathtaking and I can relate to it in a way.
    Deep piece...
    I can't chose my favorite part, whole piece is absolutely amazing.
    Keep up!

  • 16 years ago

    by Stephanie Naylor

    "I don't know how to put these in words,
    I don't know if I should,
    There are things I hold,
    But I don't know if it's time to be told..."

    Im not sure that i really understand this stanza

    "Everyday I make decisions,
    I hope that it'll not turn out to be a cloud of illusion,
    NOw this is my revelation,
    It's true that you have become my passion..."

    This part ^^ is just WOW, its very powerful and the words are so expressive. VERY vERY good, i liked it alot.

    a well deserved

    5/5