Comments : Tears.

  • 16 years ago

    by claire

    This is good - heartfelt and eloquent - but i would take out some of the words in the lines "Now I've got nothing left in me.
    I'm completely empty inside.
    There's no joy or happiness.
    Pain and tears are all i have left.
    Never again will i be joyful." or at least take out some periods - the choppiness conveys simple hopelessness, but is also makes a less pleasant read

  • 16 years ago

    by CountlessMoments

    I think your poem. its very touching and also the part when you said "Pain and tears is all i have left" wow that sounded really dramatic and powerful!

  • 16 years ago

    by Rin

    Touching and very emotional.. good job girl:3