I really like the concept behind this poem however the structure needs work. I would start by adding a more captivating title that gives a better summary of what you are trying to get across to your readers. Then work on making it flow better. However i do like the positive vibe it holds and the message is one that with even more though could do a lot of good to everyone who reads. xoxo

Nice poem with a great message.. very nicely put! and very true! Good job =)