Comments : She's pulled me through

  • 16 years ago

    by Katie

    I find it interesting how you make your thoughts separate from yourself.
    The poems general, yet I know how you feel. I can't help but feel distant again though; I want to feel closer how you're feeling with richer images and maybe symbols. For example at the part you mention Charley you could write something like, " Then Charley caressed my head. I knew everything would be okay." Maybe mention something about a red bed to represent your passion.
    So you're aware there's the letter k infront of where you seem to have meant to put now.
    Charley must be a great woman; kudos to your relationship with her.