Comments : Awakening

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow...
    Truly greatly written piece. It is deep and very interesting. It's different from anything I've read before. Powerful piece, very profound. I like your choice of words and interesting rhythm that you created.
    Effective from the first to the last line.
    The only suggestion that I have here is that you should work on the punctuation in this piece which would make it even more powerful.
    Keep up!

  • 16 years ago

    by T uh Belle lll

    Wow, seriously this should replace the dictionary definition of jealousy. Don't worry I have under control, I'm on the phone with Websters right now!

    -tia

  • 16 years ago

    by Letty

    This was great and oh so true. I was actually captivated by your choice of words. LOL. The only thing this poem is missing is punctuation, but it actually works well with this particular poem. Keep up the great writing Terra.

    Letty