I read this few times by now and it is truly amazing. Whole poem holds outstanding, so effective imagery. Your descriptions are truly superb in both stanzas. Short yet truly powerful, colored with tones of deep, touching sadness.
I like your choice of words a lot.
Excellently done!
5/5 from me, of course

Wow!!!
This is simply fascinating poem, it amazes me how much you can say in just two stanzas, you left me speechless!
Every description is so vivid and captivating and whole piece is very deep! You should be proud on your self, I don't know what to say except this was totally mind-blowing!