I loved the visonary and the word choice.The poems flow was a little off for my taste but all in all it was good.4/5

<3Amber

I loved it. The imagery that was described was just awe-inspiring and blew me away. I felt as if I was engulfed in the poem and I was left wanting more! The language used was flawless and fit the mood of the poem perfectlly. Overall it was a great write, your cousin has talent. :]
*5/5*

Oh wonderful first lines. I loved them. Ecspecially the first, I had no idea what the peice would be about but you caught my eye definintly...

In the second stanza [first line] I think you forgot one word. Become. Lol. Might be me Idk. I loved your word choice it created beautiful imagry..

It glows a bright crimson, flickers a bright gold.

That simple line right there is my all time favorite. Idk why but it had me in awe. Werid but I love it :]]

The rest of the poem was great but didn't quite hold my attention as good as the first part. But I must say I loved the repitition of the first line as the last. One thing, I feel like the flow could be altered just a bit. My be just me I am not sure.. Overall, a beautifully written peice. Great job. 5.5

Amber.

Feedback you will get, gosh your cousin surely can write! this was so deep and full of descriptive and emotive words. well done.

5/5 david

"Exterior's so sweet, interior's so harsh.
You'll see innocence, but inside you'll feel pain."-amazing i love this you should make this into a quote....5/5!

I loved it... but then again i love fire... very good...

The fire remined me of humens. the rain aeem to be in the way of a goal. I can tell u have a wide vocabulary:)

The imagery was excellent, i loved how you expressed it so beautifully. Awesome job!

tiff

OMG. Please tell your cousin to join the site, cause this poem was absolutely amazing! :) I really love the repetition of "spark, spark, spark", it was really unique and creative. The flow was flawless and the emotions were intense. Amazing job! Overall: 5.5

- Steph.

By the way - I know you told me to R/R/C Her Cliche Tragedies, but I've already done that one, so I just picked another one of your poems. :) I hope that was alright.

I really loved this poem for all the right reasons the message was great the story in itself was profoundly created and with a touch of imagination it left the reader in awe great piece