Wow. I love the repetition of "On goes the world". It adds depth and amazing power.

"To young" = "Too young"

Wow, what a wonderful poem. It is so true, and so saddening. This world is truly like that, and it's pitiful. I love how you set this up, it was truly extraordinary. Unique. Each story told with a passionate sadness for human life in general, and I love how you hit upon each general area of sadness and destruction.
One of the poems you read and go "Now why didn't I think of that"

... truly creative =]

Incredible job,
6/5
~Stephen White

This is a really good poem Keep writing
kim

Excellent poem. reminds me of one of my favorite quotes

"The only thing necessary for the triumph of evil is for good men to do nothing"

It's just too bad that with the amount of evil in the world there arn't enough good people to go around.

Uh yes the greed cruel world i agree with you nice poem and I loved how you used on goes the world 5/5

I like this. It had many aspects and a story behind each stanza, you can tell this poem was very well thought out, and the message is very strong.

It is really great the amount of meaning your poetry has, definitely keep at it.

`tia

First of all this ending blow my mind, so effective and remarkable ending.
I love this piece, it is very provoking and you described your message excellently, bravo.
You wrote this on so effective way and created this absolutely haunting atmosphere.
You kept my attention in every line and I must say I totally enjoyed in this one.

I love that use of repetition, "on goes the world"~
Effective, but not overused, and that's not something easy to achieve. Fantastic!
The emotion is there, and your flow is just, well, flawless. What else can I say, hmm?
You have your own style, and you're doing both it and poetry itself substantial justice.
Keep it up!

There's truth in your words, but not exactly. People care, but they're just too scared and cowardly to take action. (as in your stanza: "People CAN do something, but no one dares.
Men hide behind their cowardice and pride...")
Anyway, sorry, I'll review ^^

I like how you didn't really give away the whole story--left it for the readers to guess--because it gives a more clearer image. There are some places where the words are somewhat crowded, but other places where it fits in perfectly. Nice Style as well, lol.

The poem is beautiful and it's really thoughtful. Frankly, it touched me and kept me sad about the world that cares about no one. It's so disappointing. No correction to make.