For first poem I say GOOD JOB! It's got a nice rhyme and flow. Very nice job! I hope to see more work from you!
*ME*

I must agree with MyEscape, for your first poem this is simply magnificent. The message is also one with great meaning. I could say 'nice work' but that would be an understatment if this is truely your first piece of work. If you try to hone your skills in writing poetry i can pretty much promise that will go far. 5/5

Signed,
Alexander

Haha this is a cute very first poem. I liked it. Just look at the other comment about the rhyming I mean here it's not bad but I think you need more emotion then. nice job
5/5