Comments : Creativity leads to catastrophe.

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    Wow... You left me speechless!

    -Take this paintbrush, paint serpentine swirls of tragic monody.
    Skipping stones of the imagination in our oddity.
    Belated smiles twitched savagely with twisted impatience,
    to commence the dreaded perfidy in stilted remissions.-
    This opening stanza pulled me right in to this magnificent piece, it posses so captivating rhythm and you wrote it with such passion. Beautiful lines, you created breath-taking atmosphere in them with powerful wording and great pain. Well done!

    - The art of the breath in your mind driven to create,
    this painting of mutilated fear which we illuminate.
    Words that we blatantly waste upon each other's ego,
    spelt the tone of defeat without a reason to follow.-
    Again your vocab is simply flawless and you expressed emotions in this part of the poem on fascinating way!

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    A mind of a thausand souls trapped in a delirium,
    writhing and begging to be released from a static odium.
    Unlock this eyes that seeks refuge in cowardice,
    to amend the wisdom of sanity in solitary lies.-
    This stanza is also brilliant, it totally impressed me! You made mind-blowing tone with your creative writing and rhyming is so refreshing and unique like in the rest of this piece. I am not sure but maybe -thausand- should be -thousand-

    -Indulge in this self-induced moment of abberation,
    stealing frozen glimpse of winter-stained demolition.
    Wander and deplore into self-contained injury,
    these fantasy whined for their presence to be an enemy.-
    I don't know a meaning of one word in this stanza but anyway amazing lines, your talent always put me in awe and you really showed it here.

    -A pen that writes of a world seen by abstract eyes,
    replaced by a mind that follows in the breath of colored lies.
    Minority thoughts estranged from a change of memory,
    so nothing can amend this when creativity leads to catastrophe. -
    So intense ending, well done, it is effective and whole stanza is incredible. It has endlessly remarkable atmosphere.

    All in all this is one of my favorite poems of yours and I enjoyed so much in this piece, so thank you for sharing this fantastic work. You blow my mind-in absolutely positive sense.
    Keep writing your outstanding poetry!