Amazing baby.
It's like perfect :

" Quickly all my senses,
Abandon their defenses,
This world that I enter,
Holds only sweet surrender,"

Amazing lines.

This line though :
" That I can almost taste."

Well it goes great with the poem, but it kind of threw me off, eh.

But, that line does go with the poem, mentioning it was a bit off. BUT, Maybe if you took out the word " that " to help it? Idk.
Maybe it's just me

BUt, amazing job baby