Hahahaha
every time I read it I laugh more than the time before
really great one 5/5

Ahaha..omg epic right there!

Cute and well written, flows nicely off the tounge.

Wow. Thats was an ace peom. I love the way it has so many levels to it. It made me smile too. Great job! :-) xx

I like the vocabulary you used, gave it that fable sense, tis a great poem pete, the grammer tis perfect so is the flow, so i give it a 5/5!!!

Haha that took some originality and creaitivity for sure! Well thought out and well put! The last stanza truly summed up the idea of the piece, and almost provided a twist to it all. Good job with this very original, unique piece!
*ME*

Vey well done! I work in school and have read every fairytale over and over again and they do become boring ,but I loved the way you've taken them and turnt them around ,next time I have to read the three little pigs I shall think of this poem and smile.

Very funny, I liked it a lot. Makes me think of 'Shrek' or 'Hoodwinked. It made me laugh. 5/5

Hiya Pete,

I hope I am not disturbing your glorious hang over. You were right about your 'quirky' sence of humour. I have a 7 year old and often read to him. I know he would like your version of the three little pigs. I guess you could have gone on with this, but who would want to, eh?
Good stuff. I look forward to reading more of your work.

Michael 5/5

Pete

You always have a way with making me giggle while reading your "funny" poems. You share much talent with us and I do appreciate that.

I have often yearned for a life with peace and happiness; so naturually you must share that geni hidden in her bottle.

I rubbed a lamp, behold, a genie
That would grant my hearts desire
I wished for peace and happiness
Then he aged me so I could retire

^ Has to be my favorite stanza. I laughed out loud to a point where my daughter was trying to read over my shoulder.

Maybe you should think about publishing a book of nursery rythms for us parents...

Well done once again my dear!

~~Sher

Ha ha, i really enjoyed this poem. it has a nice rhyme to it and it's a good mockery, you could say, of the common fairy tales we all know. my favorite stanza

He played his pipe; a peaceful tune.
Led the kids across a nation
Amongst lies, slander, accusations
He was arrested for molestation

lol. i loved it. show me some love back on some of mine if u can. :)

Love the ryming in this pem really good 5/5 mate x

Omg thats halarious! how do you come up with this stuff???
i dont where this comes from but you're really good at it. you know how to reach out to people through your poems and thats great!

Keep it ^^!

-Katelyn-

Haha brilliant! I tried to pick out my favorite stanza but I couldn't choose! Each one was so hilarious and brilliantly written. You really did an amazing job with this poem and I had so much fun reading this...

I rubbed a lamp, behold, a genie
That would grant my hearts desire
I wished for peace and happiness
Then he aged me so I could retire

Haha - interesting idea how retirement is the genie's way of brining us peace and happiness - very clever!

Their fort's secure with bricks and mortar
Has stood and barely shaken
So Wolf lit up the dynamite
That turned Pigs into smoky bacon

^^ Very funny.. great job with that stanza.. you have quite the imagination and great talent to tell such a story - based on fairytales but adding your own unique style and stories to them.

The thought that "Happily Ever After"
is just around the next twisty bend
It's nonsense, rubbish, poppycock
Life's a struggle right to The End.

^^Perfect way to end the poem. All fairy tales end with a happily ever after - but this poem is the opposite of all fairy tales so of course it cant end with one. Great job! Def a fun read.. it's good to get away from all the dark and sad poetry on this site.

thanks for writing this poem! and thanks for the comment too! =)
(I thought about changing the title on my poem as you suggested but I figured the title I have now actually draws more readers in to actually read the poem because a lot of people can relate to the title... =)

Pete,
Don't know how I managed to miss this wonderfully penned humorous write. You have done an amazing job telling the twist of fairytale life. I wonder if my mom would have read truth's to me would I have turned out any different. Life is a struggle to the very end and you have nailed that in this write. Sometimes we can't see the truth because of what we have learned in fairytales. Awesome talent.