Comments : If Walls Could Cry....

  • 12 years ago

    by SilentRebuke

    Really great one Charisma! I like the pace to this poem, and the fact that it isn't too cluttered with words, shorter verses, but still just as powerful. I really liked the 7th stanza:
    "It's been so hard to pretend
    When I'm breaking down again"
    Love it, 5/5!

  • 12 years ago

    by TheRevelation

    I absolutely loved the flow of this poem. The last stanza finished it all with a good bang! Nice job.
    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Bradley Peter

    It was a good piece. My favorite stanzas were by far numbers six and seven. The emotions, rhymes and flow was great.

    Brad

  • 12 years ago

    by debbylyn

    Somehow listening to a sad song can just bring on the tears....reminds me of that Joe Diffie song...

    Good rhyming and flow....I can so relate to it!

    Take care, Debbie

  • 12 years ago

    by C Cattaway

    It sounded like a well versed song.. maybe Joni Mitchell would have sang those lines, once.. You have taken a common subject, and given it a personal slant.. Well done. Fantastically written. xx

  • 12 years ago

    by Becca

    5/5! that was great. I understand what it's like to be tired of holding everything in and just wanting release. Great Piece!

  • 12 years ago

    by TillyMariex

    Wow...this is like...amazing...i really like it <3

  • 11 years ago

    by Gem

    "Turned a sad song on
    And with it sang along
    I didn't know the words
    But I understood the hurt"

    Oh wow. I think EVERYONE male and female alike can relate whole heartedly to this stanza.

    Amazing work Charisma, as always!! I've missed your poems since i've been gone from the site, but now i'm back, i hope to read more and more =)

    5/5
    Gem

  • 11 years ago

    by Ike Dizzle

    Aww I know the feeling of a broken heart and it sucks cuz u seem like you are all alone and no one feels ur pain. Its hard to get over bt you will. I'm in the middle of that now. Great poem though 5/5
    -vino