I'll start with the bad. The ending [last line mostly] was a bit off, with the whole flow thing. Actually, as I look back it's only the last line. It fits in perfectly, but it just doesn't flow, maybe a few extra syllables. . .somehow?

My favorite part was this :

" Through tired eyes it`s hard to see, the people we used to be;
So innocent and carefree, we hadn`t met the world yet,
But people come and people go, it`s a fact that we all know;
Unwilling to risk your unscathed back, you put me out like a cigarette"

Amazing stanza that is.
The entire poem is great.
You have great meaning, easy to relate to.
I mean the entire thing was almost flawless.

5/5
xD
Keep it up, darling.