This one has a very very powerful ending. i loved how u related alot of the stuff to the flowing cold water. it was a great connection u made and that the readers make wen they get to read it. i think i liked this one so much because it didn't really have a real central flow 2 it yet it still kept u wanting 2 finish every line and poems that can do that with ryme every line or flow thru the whole thing are definately works of art. 5/5. keep it!!!