My breath

Ok i wrote a new poem called "my breath"

Can u guyss read it?....

i'll read up to 4 of your poems, just tell me which ones !!!!

I will NOT read them if u don't give me a name!...that's the only rule!

so please read it rate it and comment on it!!!
plz!!!!!!

thanks!
***aLy***

Ok done with urs...anyone else?

Done. I really don't mind which poems you read.. I just ask that you be as honest as you can, and give me any suggestions that you think would make the poem(s) better.

Thanks in advance,
Bethany

Ok, done with yours bethany...
anyone else?