Constructive Criticism

I am tired of getting nice little happy notes for comments on my poems I am looking for someone to tell me whats wrong with my poems what you don't like. that way I can improve and strive to be better. I'm not saying that I'll listen to or care about you adivice I'm just saying that I'm tired of happy little nothing (wow ___&___ were such good lines and ___ was a good idea. your flow was off but I could still feel your meening) no that dosen't count.

Rules:
-The more helpful I find your Criticism the better(personal rule)
-Don't talk about the flow, spelling, grammer, or anything else like that. (I know that that is bad and I've been working on it don't remind me!)(please)
-I would rather you leave titles. You don't have to unless you want to be rrc.
-No liners I don't care why you wrote the poem
-Don't worry about your words hurting my feelings I'm a big girl I can take it.
-For every 1 of mine you do I'll do 1 of yours
-You must read/rate/comment the entire thing.
-Oh and please no poems are unsuitable

Thank you for your help you can choose from these titles

-Guilt
-Not so Perfect
-The Last Day
-Ode to a Teenager
-Duct Taped Mind
-Hell
-A Behind the Scenes Thank You
-Two Teachers
-Bubbles

I did four of yours.

I tried giving you any thoughts that crossed my mind and how you could make the poem better. I'm sorry if I wasn't too detailed on my suggestions.

Please do;
"Love is a mystery..Solve it."
"Accident or Murder?"
"Ocean View"
"Taking that Leap of Faith."

Thanks in Advance.!

If one critiques your words and follows this rule:
"Don't talk about the flow, spelling, grammer, or anything else like that." and I'm sure rhyme is included, then how can you know what needs to be improved?

After reading a few of your writes I see why you don't want any one to talk about spelling, grammar, rhythm, misused words, punctuation or anything dealing with language arts.....you have no command of these.

-Leap Of Faith aka Temps
thanks for your poems
it was inspiring

-H E losey
do you have any poems you want read?

Thank you, I appreciate the comments.

Anyone else?

Thank you Rikki

please let me know
which poem you want me to rrc

Thank you Rikki

that poem was beautiful

anyoun else