Another newbie...lol

Hello I am new to this group and I am looking for opinions, comments, concerns, ratings and advice on my writing… I’ve always been an artist, and I know sometimes it takes several points of view to see something clearly…will anyone who has the time help to show me how I could improve...and i would gladly do the same for others who also feel this is true....

Hey1 i would be happy to do so..

I did one of yours.

Please do my latest,
thanks.