Death embrace (senryu)

  • Goodbye
    16 years ago

    Hi everyone,
    I would love to get some feedback about this poem. I will return a favour. Just tell me the name of your poem. Thank you...

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    Left body alone
    One night my soul did not come
    Stayed too long in dreams

    Wandering and lost
    Went to embrace you again
    Final fatal kiss

    Stayed there to hold you
    Sprinkling kisses around
    Stayed forever with you

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