Should I?

I haven't written in a long time because I have been distracted by my boyfriend. We have been through allot and I wanted to get back into gear and write again. I have been trying to write him a poem for a month and nothing seems good enough. But I think I may have written a winer. Its his birthday coming up and I need honest feed back before giving it to him because... it means allot to me that I impress him and I am not very good at writing about happy things, and I think im trying too hard. Please help me by giving me honest feedback on my last poem -dreams-. Tell me anything you think about it. What you DO and DONOT like. Ect thank you soo much. I will make it up to you.

So should I give it to him? Let me know